Tuesday 8 March 2016

Blog Commenting

one day i went to the shop and bought some lollies and then i went to my friends house and plyed on his xbox with him and we played fifa and i was england and i bet him by 5 goals as he was so useless. after that we went to my other friends house and we played on the trampolean and we got burnt as the sun was shining so hot and we had no sunscreen on and the tramp wasnt under a tree and there were no clouds so we ended up red as. i did not sleep much that night as i was saw.
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  1. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:14

    Hi Jim
    I think your story was great but you maybe should use capitals after fullstops.Maybe when your finished your story check your spelling.Come check out my blog http://sserins.blogspot.co.nz/
    From Erin

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  2. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:16

    Hey Jim
    Well done Jim,I really liked how you told me about your day, but next time you could work on your punctuation and grammar.Also man check out my blog
    http://ssethanb.blogspot.co.nz/
    Ethan Barton

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  3. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:17

    Jim I thought you explained your day really well, after reading your writing I noticed a few spelling mistakes and some punctuation errors so after writing I would suggest that you get a dictionary and check some spelling. Please come and check out my blog so that I can get some feedback.

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  4. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:17

    Hey Jim.
    I really like the way you told a story.
    One thing you could work on would be your spelling.
    Please come look at my blog @ http://ssjarvisb.blogspot.co.nz/
    Thanks
    Jarvis

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  5. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:17

    Hey Jim, I really like the way you've written your writing. I think maybe you could add more detail into your work by adding describing words. You should also check your punctuation/grammar and spelling.You should come and check out my blog: ssamreen.v.blogspot.co.nz
    Amreen

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  6. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:17

    Hello Jim
    It was a great piece of writing, I learnt many things about your adventure. Maybe next time work on your punctuation as its lacking it.Come check out my blog at. http://ssgeorgeo.blogspot.co.nz/
    Thanks George Oliver

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  7. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:18

    Hey Jim Nice story sounds fun. I like how you told the truth about the sunscreen.
    One thing to work on is your punctuation,grammar and spelling. Also it would be more interesting is you added descriptive language. Come and look at my blog http://sstamzinr.blogspot.co.nz/

    Tamzin

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  8. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:19

    Hey Jim,
    Great to hear about your holiday. Perhaps next time you could use capital letters and proofread your writing. Also using more descriptive words could make it more interesting. When you're done reading this comment perhaps you could check out my blog at ssharrisonb.blogspot.co.nz.

    Harrison

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  9. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:19

    Hey Jim,
    I really enjoyed your writing because you have explained everything clearly, but next time you should proofread your work. It has some spelling mistakes and some punctuation errors. But otherwise, really good.
    By the way come look at my blog. Here's the link http://sstinaj.blogspot.co.nz/
    Tina J

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  10. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:20

    Hi jim.I think it is a great blog that tells how much fun you had.Maby you should work on full stops and spelling errors.Don't forget to come and look at my blog to see what I've been doing lately http://sshamishs.blogspot.co.nz/
    [:

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  11. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:20

    Hi Jim

    I really like your recount it was very interesting. Next time you might want to proofread it for spelling errors, punctuation errors and capital letter. Besides this you did a really good job. Please come and check out my blog at
    http://sstanikan.blogspot.co.nz/

    Thanks
    Tanika

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  12. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:20

    Hello Jim
    I really like this story that you have written about your day.
    One big thing you could work on is Punctuation,
    please come and have a look at my blog sometime
    from Georgia

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  13. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:20

    Hi Jim
    I really like your story.
    Next time try to remember to add punctuation and capital letters, maybe you could check a dictionary for spelling mistakes.
    Please come check out my blog at http://ssjennae.blogspot.co.nz/
    Thanks
    Jenna

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  14. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:20

    Hey Jim I liked that you explained everything that you did on the weekend. You could improve on editing your writing. When finished your blog make sure you edit your writing and maybe someone else could read through it to. I enjoyed reading your blog, come and read my blog at: http://8gmc.blogspot.co.nz/2016/03/blog-commenting.html#comment-form

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  15. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:20

    Hi Jim.
    I really enjoyed your story.Keep it up and make more.
    One thing you could work on is your punctuation and spelling but other than that it was great.
    If you can take a look at my blog at http://ssdanielp.blogspot.co.nz/
    Thanks Daniel

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  16. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:21

    Hey Jim,
    I really like your piece of writing, but you have quite a lot of errors! I think you need to work on your punctuation and spelling. Try and improve on these things and soon your writing will be much better! If you can, Come and check out my blog so you can give me feedback to at . http://sssophiah.blogspot.co.nz/ . Sophia Hasan-Stein.

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  17. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:21

    Jim I thought you explained your day really well, after reading this I noticed a few spelling and punctuation errors, I suggest you get a dictionary and go through your work so you can fix your spelling. http://sssamp.blogspot.co.nz/

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  18. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:22

    Hey Jim great work there I think this is an interesting story. Next time make sure you edit it and maybe get a dictionary or use the internet. Make sure you use capital letters at the start of a sentence. I think you should check your punctuation because I found a couple mistakes. Make sure you check out my blog http://ssjordanb.blogspot.co.nz/.

    From,
    Jordan

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  19. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:22

    Hi Jim
    I really like how you wrote all the things that you did
    One thing you could work on would be your spelling and grammar but the rest was great
    Please come and have a look at my blog at www.sschristopherg.blogspot.com
    Thank you Christopher g

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  20. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:23

    http://ssmariat.blogspot.co.nz/
    Well done Jim that was a very interesting story.
    Next time you might want to proof read it before you publish it.
    I found a couple punctuation mistakes , so you might want to think about that for next time. Besides all the missing capital letters and punctuation mistakes you did a great job.Come and check out my blog @ =ssmariat.blogspot.co.nz
    Thanks Maria

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  21. Anonymous8 March 2016 at 14:23

    Hey Jim
    I love the writing. It is very detailed but maybe you improve your grammar and get someone to get someone to buddy read it before you publish it
    Oh yea come my blog at ssgeordier.blogspot.com
    From your friend, Geordie :D

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  22. Ashley Jones28 June 2016 at 16:07

    I agree with you that what we say is a reflection of ourselves that’s why I always try to share something I know about a topic whenever I leave a comment.
    In doing this, there’s a better chance that my comment will not be ignored and will be posted.
    I’m sure we’ll be meeting the same bloggers and it helps to be seen as someone reliable or insightful.
    Besides, I’ve already taken the time to read the post so why not take the time to contribute something as well. It’s a nice feeling when you do that. ��
    Thanks for the tips!
    Regards
    AShley Jones

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